According
to an article by Dennis Chaptman, there is a reassuring amount of high school students
that volunteer, but “‘resume-padding’-not simple altruism-may be the driving
force”. This does not mean colleges should begin to ignore the collection of volunteering
experiences students have collected over the years; it is an impossibility to
draw the distinction between those students who act genuinely and those who hold
“resume padding” as their key driving
force. Even in the case of those who start off on their community service
endeavors with an intention to increase the favor towards them by colleges, over
time a love towards their volunteer work may develop. After all, how can one
who stays intensely committed to a certain job dislike what they do, especially
in the case of community service when there is no monetary incentive and a
notable amount of mobility exist? Some
may argue that “Their [teens’] attachments are more fleeting and there is a
lack of attachment that seems to pervade” (Chaptman 157), however the fallibility
in this case falls more upon adults who place the youth under the pressure of
rushing time, inculcating them with the belief that they are fast approaching
the “real world”, undermining the reality of the young years.
Kalbak, your post is once again wonderfully worded. In my opinion, I think you accomplished your goal of informing and persuading your audience. You provided great amount of evidence and your opinion was also striking. I like the picture you included, since it made me laugh. Terrific job, Brandon!
ReplyDeleteArmine, I totally agree on you on how community service should be mandatory for high school students. I like the points that you have stated about how volunteering helps students in many ways. I enjoyed reading your blog and loved the writing style! Btw love the picture and his cheeks☺
ReplyDeleteArmine, you developed and analyzed your argument clearly. Your wording is clean and you transition smoothly from one idea to the other. You chose your quotations wisely to add to your points and blended them into your writing seamlessly. They did not feel forced and were explained fully. Stellar job!
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ReplyDeleteI agree on the fact that some students volunteer in order to place their service hours on the college application, while other students truly enjoy working to help others. However, some students may not complete additional community service hours because they enjoy it. They might want to show colleges that they can stay committed to a service for an extended period of time. If there is a next time, you should consider elaborating on that concept.
ReplyDeleteDear Armine, I totally agree with you on every single point you made. This was a very interesting read, and your use of vocabulary is so spot on. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteArmine, your blog was written with such great detail and strong words that I could not help myself and had to read it again. I think your words are able to persuade people to actually do community service because after reading your blog they will understand how much it benefits them. Oh and I love the picture!
ReplyDeleteMy dearest Armine, the only way I am able to start off my comment is by commending you on the undeniable beauty of your concluding sentence. Although I disagree with you overall and found a few of your arguments to be subjective and open to argument, I cannot deny the fact that you presented the information in a sufficient and well written persuasive manner, taking the counterarguments into consideration. But if you think about it, do you not think the requirement of community service only cheapens its intentions and makes it meaningless, as now all high school students must do it to graduate?
ReplyDeleteArmine, after reading your post, I think I can conclude that we both have the same mentality and opinion when it comes to this subject. The way you have written everything, described your thoughts, and expressed your argument was very well prepared. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteAlthough I do not agree with the mentality that community service should be mandatory, I commend you on the attractiveness of your blog post. If your objective was to persuade, you have unquestionably succeeded. This argument is well developed and flawlessly delivered. I felt as if the transitions from your points were well done, and the quotes fit in perfectly with your writing.
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